Kingdom Rush - Story

[EliBarracuda]

Hi everyone! I'm EliBarracuda and I decided to make a Kingdom Rush story. First of all, sorry on my bad English, I'm from Croatia. I started my story in Word, and I am very happy that I can show it to some KR fans. My characters will be heroes, and after, maybe I'll add some more. Then, some of the heroes will be on good (Kingdom's side) and some will be on the Evil side. I'll post which hero is on which side. I hope you'll like my project.

Of course, I'll post some information later.

[maverixk]

Hey! Welcome! I can't wait to see your rendition of this fantastical world!

[billakoz16]

I HAVE AN IDEA

[billakoz16]

Chapter 1: The world is changed!
The poeple are worried!The wather is strange!The elves look like they waiting something!The wariors are nervous!A messenger came from the desert and sayd weird thinks about a strange creature of metal but he died before he could explain us more.He was weirdilly harmed!The king desided to send a scout team to Hammerhold.

[Epicazeroth]

Chapter 1: The world is change!
The poeple are worried!The wather is strange!The elves look like they waiting something!The wariors are nervous!A messenger came from the desert and saied weird thinks about a new army but he died before told us more.He was weirdilly harmed!The king desided to send a scout team.

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[700poundsofcheese]

Chapter 1: The world is change!
The poeple are worried!The wather is strange!The elves look like they waiting something!The wariors are nervous!A messenger came from the desert and saied weird thinks about a new army but he died before told us more.He was weirdilly harmed!The king desided to send a scout team.

UUUUUUUUUUUMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM ok then

[TITANICB]

Chapter 1: The world is change!
The poeple are worried!The wather is strange!The elves look like they waiting something!The wariors are nervous!A messenger came from the desert and saied weird thinks about a new army but he died before told us more.He was weirdilly harmed!The king desided to send a scout team.

...............ok.

[billakoz16]

Chapter 2:A new evil
The team consisted of Sir Gerald, Malik and Bolin.His majestry sent them to the Hammerhold.But whan they saw it from a hill in the desert about three kilometres away,they got scocked.The place was full of strange machines and metalic buildings.Not a human alive and a great army of metalic creautures was marching outside to the Northwest, to LInerea!They had to warn the king .Strange buildings with the name ''factory'' printed in the top of them were the bigger ones.They run to hide but a group of strange metal creature who called their selves robots ambush them.They got in their way and shoot them with a strange weapon simmilar to Bolins...

[billakoz16]

factores

[billakoz16]

Chapter3:An unexcpected friend
The guns were blocked by a magic shield.Two dragons-a blue and a white- sudenlly came from the skies and burned the creatures as soon as they were close enough .A warrior with a white staff was siting at the neck of the white one.''I'm Avan the dragonmaster and I'm here to serve his majesty with my dragons and my magic''said the stranger''The prophesy was clear:when the enemy will come from a land outside the earth the dragons will raise again.''Then you are about to meet some new friends in this quest if your dragons are good and not evil as the legend tells.''answered polity Sir Gerald.''And new enemys! Don't forget the eenemys1My boomstick is restless in my hands!''complete him the dwarf named Bolin and they all lauhf.

[silveroakelf]

... Sure

[billakoz16]

Chapter4:To the Elves
Magnus was busy with his magic things and Ignus was bored.Why the king didn't send him with the others.The good was that he had free time but the capital was boring.No,he coulden't just sit and wait.He had to do something.''I think I will go to the Silveroak forest to visit Alleria. She was strange the last time I went to her lands.Now all of her race were strange.That's it.''he sayd to himself and run to start packeting.

[billakoz16]

the last time i went

[spark123]

Hi everyone! I'm EliBarracuda and I decided to make a Kingdom Rush story. First of all, sorry on my bad English, I'm from Croatia. I started my story in Word, and I am very happy that I can show it to some KR fans. My characters will be heroes, and after, maybe I'll add some more. Then, some of the heroes will be on good (Kingdom's side) and some will be on the Evil side. I'll post which hero is on which side. I hope you'll like my project.

Of course, I'll post some information later.

Awesome idea, try and incorporate the heroes.

[billakoz16]

Chapter5:Atack
The wizard was very nervous.He had to gather his orcs,deamons and monsters and atack to the Forskan valley to regain control of the valley as well as the alliagence of it's elementals.He gave commant to the legeons of his orcs and goblins to apper in front of him.The desert was full of Robots and metal buildings,his alien friend wasn't a laier at all.''By your command my lord''said the dark slayer who was second leader of his armys.He came forth with the flag of the black fire which was his symbol.''Atack.'' he said while he was thinking how he will get the bandits and the brigiands along with the trolls and the spiderlings in his side.

[TheHallMonitor]

Recommendations:

-Better grammar.
-Longer chapters... at least ten times the current size...
-Take a literature class.

[spark123]

Yeah they're really short for a chapter

[billakoz16]

Hey i'm only11 and i'm grom Greece -also if you want 1-2 chapters every day they must be short

[spark123]

Quality over quantity

[TheHallMonitor]

Quality over quantity

Both seem to be severely lacking...

But I understand, since you're from Greece and all.