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A poem from outer Internet

by tmn loveblue » Wed Nov 16, 2016 1:10 pm

Fate

she waited at the café close to the sea
the waiter seemed nervous
about the fit of her dress
he spilled a few ice cubes from her tea

he strolled the sandy lanes serenaded by sun
the shade buzzed
with summer sounds
he always walked the quietest ones

she drifted in waters of so many thoughts
the ice cubes crackled
in the sweat of her glass
her skirt folds fluttered when the breeze was caught

today he turned onto a busier street
a woman glanced
from the shade of a café
if he stopped for a moment their eyes would meet

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I picked up this poem a few years ago from a blog called Clarity of Night. It was beautiful, and still is.
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Re: A poem from outer Internet

by RaZoR LeAf » Wed Nov 16, 2016 1:29 pm

Ice cubes in tea!?

*drops cup*

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Re: A poem from outer Internet

by tmn loveblue » Wed Nov 16, 2016 1:39 pm

I take that as a compliment ;)

In my place there are lots of drinks that involve tea and ice. Like, with honey, milk, lemonade, and so on. I do like them a lot :P They taste nice with the extra ingredients!
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Re: A poem from outer Internet

by The Kingmaker » Tue Nov 22, 2016 9:32 pm

I like it, especially (unless im wrong) the ambiguity in the end of the resolution, generally have a sort of

yes he stops

or, more often,

but he does not stop.

I like the ambiguity.
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Re: A poem from outer Internet

by tmn loveblue » Wed Nov 23, 2016 2:56 pm

The Kingmaker wrote:I like it, especially (unless im wrong) the ambiguity in the end of the resolution, generally have a sort of

yes he stops

or, more often,

but he does not stop.

I like the ambiguity.

Yes, I liek the ambiguity too ;) Though I wish he did stop :(
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